Sabtu, 08 Oktober 2011
Joza, The good racer
I have a friend in my class. His name is Joza. He lives in Cikarang-Bekasi. When he was in junior high school, he likes racing, and now this interest become his hobby. Everyday he always brings the automotive magazine, and he learns more about it, so now he understand more about it, but every night when he has a free time, he always goes to the racing field to take a part of the racing. He often beats his enemies in racing match because he is the good racer.
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Simple writing:-). Well, Aldi, u hafta mark the topic sentence as well as the concluding sentence, so the reader will easily recognize what ur writing is about. Mind ur consistency in using the tenses, and punctuation. Well, em still wondering ur sentence in line 4. What type of sentence is that, for there is no period until line 8. It's interesting topic, though. Write better next time, ok!
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